9 Love me more, for all, Up on full Moon night Love me in Sun light, As a lovely might . 10 Keep me safe, Save me with love, When I am sick Heal me with love. 11 I am aware of you Even others are unaware, No trouble can dishearten me, I love thee –till death one
Commitment We will stay happy Till death do us part
updated on June 3rd 2011
2 comments:
I really like these short poems. They are short, but sweet. 9 and 10 look good, but 11 needs a couple of edits:
"I am aware of you
Even others are unaware,
No trouble can dishearten me,
I love thee –till death one"
I don't think you need the one after death. I should be "I love thee- till death". Or something needs to be after death like "Till death do us part."
Dear Michi
I corrected as per your suggestion.
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