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7
When the child says
She keeps silence
Sometime she shouts
8
When child learns
She will encourage
Both think they age
9
When father bless
She always engaged
When the child learns
Hey, this is the woman from the Young Author's Conference. On number 8, the first line should have a the or a in it after child. It should read "When the child learns..."
For number 8, I would also probably add a that in the last line, so it reads like this: "When the child learnsShe will encourageBoth think that they age. "It makes me wonder though; are they both just aging because of time passing or are they aging because they are both learning?
because they are both learning?
yes, I changed to "When the child learns..."Thank very much.
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Hey, this is the woman from the Young Author's Conference. On number 8, the first line should have a the or a in it after child. It should read "When the child learns..."
For number 8, I would also probably add a that in the last line, so it reads like this:
"When the child learns
She will encourage
Both think that they age. "
It makes me wonder though; are they both just aging because of time passing or are they aging because they are both learning?
because they are both learning?
yes, I changed to "When the child learns..."
Thank very much.
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