Everything was good and enjoyable, when I was strong
I learn to accept life as it is while getting old and weak
Each and every day is a new day, when I was a child
The taste of food was best, when I was hungry
The woolen clothing are needed, when I feel cold
The beautiful face appreciated, when it is innocent
Every morning was inspiring, when I was young
There are good things when I am aware
The music sounds best, when I am content
When someone beg or borrow, I feel pain
I am nowhere else, if I am here and active
There are ups and downs in life, I agree
Things are needed when a family is growing
Dreams are illusions not delusions
The interdependency is reality
There is nothing free, I accept
2 comments:
Not sure what to think of this poem yet. I may need to read it again to really get it's full message. Some edits:
Line 3 needs an "a" before child: "When I was a child"
The verbs need to be the same tense in line 4. Either:
The taste of food was best, when I was hungry OR
The taste of food is best, when I am hungry.
Line 9 should be sounds, not sound.
Line 11 needs 2 am's:
I am nowhere else, if I am here and active
Line 12 needs 'downs' not down
I think line 13 needs an 'are' and 'a': things are needed when a family is growing
Things needed when family is growing
Other than that, good work! Just little adjustments to make.
Dear Michi
Thank you much for editing.
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